Tuesday, November 30, 2010

Writing Flaw

The character Jaaziah seems unreal. His constant work ethic that is very strenuous seems impossible to be done by any human being. He appears to almost have no fun by is always working out or training for a competition, either with a team or as an individual on his own. Jaaziah overly dedication must force him to have no social life or interaction amongst his peers. Jaaziah cannot have the time to hangout or chill with his friends to play video games or watch television because his life appears to be extremly busy. If he gets up early to workout and then has classes plus a team practice, homework and studying incorporated into his daily schedule he can't have to time to do the typical things guys his age do. From having strenuous workouts so often Jaaziah has to be physically and mentally drained. This will not only affect his time spent with his family, friends, or teammates. But require him to get more rest for his body which takes more time away from him having a social life.
Another of Jaaziah's flaw's is that appears bias. He only talks about sports as if sports are the only thing that happen in the world and every reader can relate to what he is saying. He never mentions real life experiences and how it affects him or others unless it has a direct correlation to his own personal sport. Even when talking about sports he makes other sports seem less important or necessary than his own particular sport. Jaaziah praises himself and his sport and in the process disrespects other sports. He often neglects to reference other sports even exist on most occasions. If he were not so intrigued by his sport and himself maybe he would notice and recognize what is happening in the real world around him. Jaaziah needs to adjust his focus and his knowledge and at least for one day realize the truth that is surrounding him.


Jaaziah Bethea.

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