Another boring weekend: Triple Take.

Normal students would go to the grocery store on the weekend and bring back any supplies they needed for their dorm room in the bus or a friend’s car. Instead, I waited for my family to arrive from four hours away and bring another cartload of things I needed. My parents were coming this way for a friend’s and they decided to haul my brother along. I awoke the next morning, usually my lazy Saturday, ready to do anything that I could t0 make sure that my brother’s trip hadn’t been a waste. We went around the campus before finally deciding that going to the city for the hour before our parents had to leave would be fun. While I was trying to entertain my brother I hadn’t given proper credit to the amount of time it takes to experience the art of using public transportation. Of course, when we finally make it from the bus to the metro my brother has no idea where he would like to go, I pick the center of town and when we get out of the train my brother decides that he’d like to see something different. Thus, my brother and I ended up getting back onto the metro and out at a semi-random stop and find ourselves, as fate would have it, end up walking at least a dozen blocks through the city and find ourselves facing the monuments. Again.
Normal students would go to the grocery store on the weekend and bring back any supplies they needed for their dorm room in the bus or a friend’s car. Instead, you waited for your family to arrive from four hours away and bring another cartload of things you needed. Your parents were coming this way for a friend’s party and they decided to haul your brother along. You awoke the next morning, usually my lazy Saturday, ready to do anything that you could t0 make sure that your brother’s trip hadn’t been a waste. You two went around the campus before finally deciding that going to the city for the hour before your parents had to leave would be fun. While you were trying to entertain your brother you hadn’t given proper credit to the amount of time it takes to experience the art of using public transportation. Of course, when you two finally make it from the bus to the metro your brother has no idea where he would like to go, you pick the center of town and when you both get out of the train your brother decides that he’d like to see something different. Thus, you and your brother ended up getting back onto the metro and out at a semi-random stop and find ourselves, as fate would have it, end up walking at least a dozen blocks through the city and find yourselves facing the monuments. Again.
Normal students would go to the grocery store on the weekend and bring back any supplies they needed for their dorm room in the bus or a friend’s car. Instead, he waited for his family to arrive from four hours away and bring another cartload of things he needed. His parents were coming this way for a friend’s party and they decided to haul his brother along. He awoke the next morning, usually his lazy Saturday, ready to do anything that he could t0 make sure that his brother’s trip hadn’t been a waste. They went around the campus before finally deciding that going to the city for the hour before their parents had to leave would be fun. While he was trying to entertain my brother he hadn’t given proper credit to the amount of time it takes to experience the art of using public transportation. Of course, when they finally make it from the bus to the metro his brother has no idea where he would like to go, so the older brother picks the center of town and when they get out of the train his brother decides that he’d like to see something different. Thus, they ended up getting back onto the metro and out at a semi-random stop and find ourselves, as fate would have it, end up walking at least a dozen blocks through the city and find themselves facing the monuments. Again.
While the first paragraph, in first person, seems to have bits of sarcasm and humor the latter two paragraphs lack. I tried not to change the latter two paragraphs much, the resulting words reading as something not as sympathetic. In order to have paragraphs in different points of view read well, the overall structure and diction of the piece should be edited rather than just replacing the pronouns.

~Nitesh Arora